As the brief was to produce a silent film, we as a group had to rely on the action and camera work within the frame to make our story clear the audience. The camera angles used in the film also had to be good and so i recalled some iconic and rememberable camera angle from films that are within the same genre of our film.
The Dodgy Deal
When ever there is a dodgy deal going on within gangster films, they are either set in an alleyway or a mob boss' office. Here is a clip from Guy Ritchie's Lock,Stock &Two Smoking Barrels, where the boss is telling off one of his henchmen. This character is similar to Big Pete as he too has his henchmen (the Bodyguard) who seem slightly frightened of him. This is definitely how we pictured Switch's drugs deal scene to be, in an office/hotel room with bodyguards and an scary looking boss.
The Slow Motion Walk.
The original scene that we would base our slow motion walk on is a scene in Superbad where two geeky guys walk of a bus in slow motion, thinking they look really good in their new clothes. Which is exactly what happens within our film. But unfortunately i was unable to find the clip, but this is one from Quentin Tarantinos classic Reservoir Dogs. This is the iconic walking scene where each Mister and Nice Guy Eddie walk in slow motion out of the breakfast diner into the cars. The slow motion effect instantly makes the nerdiest of characters cool and that's why we want to use this scene within our film, for comedic effect.
Below is an example clip of geeky guys looking sooooo cool in their sharp suits and slow mo :P
Following Someone:
In the following scene we wanted to create like a 1920s sleuth atmosphere and i think that's as long as you have the right 'sneaky' movements, its the music that makes the scene that extra bit special. And to me the only acceptable soundtrack that creates this mood is the classic Pink Panther soundtrack.
Tuesday, 14 December 2010
Photo storyboard
During the planning stages of production we had to organise a day in we could meet and take photos for our photo storyboard. Organised by Rachel O'Connell we met in the afternoon and it allowed the other crew member to meet our friends/cast of the film. The problems we had on this day were that our original actor who would have played Charlie was unable to attend so we were able to persuade another friend to help out and take his role :) The final problem was the lighting, as it was winter the daylight hours got shorter and the streetlights came on earlier so we had to think about continuity and lighting for our final production.
Photo storyboard
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Props List
Various props we needed on the day foor our film:
COOKIES/TRAY
A CAR
FOR SALE SIGN ON THE CAR
BLINDFOLD
POT OF MONEY FOR FAKE CHARITY
BRIEFCASE FULL OF MONEY
FAKE DRUGS (BAGS OF SUGAR AND FLOUR)
EMPTY CAN
COOKIES/TRAY
A CAR
FOR SALE SIGN ON THE CAR
BLINDFOLD
POT OF MONEY FOR FAKE CHARITY
BRIEFCASE FULL OF MONEY
FAKE DRUGS (BAGS OF SUGAR AND FLOUR)
EMPTY CAN
Cast List
FRANK - Ashley Walker
CHARLIE - Jack Glister
BIG PETE - Lewis Plaster
BODYGUARD - Matthew Partlett
EXTRAS - Sharon Uyinwmen
- Halle Smith
- Iman Shafi
CHARLIE - Jack Glister
BIG PETE - Lewis Plaster
BODYGUARD - Matthew Partlett
EXTRAS - Sharon Uyinwmen
- Halle Smith
- Iman Shafi
Guy Ritchie
Born 10 September 1968Guy Ritchie is an English screenwriter, film maker reknowned for his Brit-crime comedies like Lock,Stock & Two Smoking Barrels , RocknRolla and Snatch, which we widely based our film upon.
Film attributes: (click links for more information)
| 1998 | Lock, Stock and Two Smoking Barrels | ||||
| 2000 | Snatch | ||||
| 2001 | The Hire: Star | ||||
| 2002 | Swept Away | ||||
| 2005 | Revolver | ||||
| 2007 | Suspect | ||||
| 2008 | RocknRolla | ||||
| 2009 | Sherlock Holmes | ||||
| 2011 | Sherlock Holmes 2 | ||||
| 2012 | The Fistfull |
Snatch Trailer
Lock,Stock & Two Smoking Barrels Trailer
SWITCH titles
I researched different fonts and came across this website www.dafont.com that has great fonts for our movie'Switch'as our film is a slapstick comedy this website specifically had a font genre called comic which had a variety of different fonts, some very humorous and some a bit more serious heres some example which i thought would help the audience relate to the movie and understand the humor;
The first font is called Komika poster.
The second font is called Slapstick comic.
The Third font is called Badaboom.
The fourth font is called Que font.
The fifth font is called Shake and bake.
The first font is called Komika poster.
The second font is called Slapstick comic.
The Third font is called Badaboom.
The fourth font is called Que font.
The fifth font is called Shake and bake.
Money Making Schemes Research
From the start our group knew that we had to come up with quick and stupid ways that our lead characters Frank and Charlie could use to make enough money to buy their car. But we we also realised that they couldn't be elaborate schemes as they were not smart enough to some up with one, plus the council estate setting wasn't fit for a scam on the scale of the BBC hit show Hustle. Therefore, web had to research or come up with smaller scams and find a way to put a comedic twist on them. These were a few I found.
Cleaning Windows
is something that i see in the East end nearly every morning and it is a good way to make money. In past years there have been many comedy sketches that make cleaning windows funny, whether it be buckets of water falling or the ladder slipping from under the character. This is a possible scam that we could use, however staging it correctly within the limited amount of time we have could be a problem whilst also finding a location.
Selling cookies is yet another scheme that we could easily put together for the duo to use. It would require minimal props and we would only need to find a few houses to film at, but since friends live around our shooting location, that shouldnt be a problem. Plus the image of seeing two grown men trying to sell something usually donw by girl scouts could be funny. I'm thinking costumes. :)
Selli
ng....their bodies?This was one idea we thought of ourselves as we knew that seeing the duo dressing up as women for money would definitely get some laughs and put a lighter edge on a sinister subject of prositution. We were thinking of getting the pair to lure other men over, get in the car and then run out with their clothes and money.
Cleaning Windows
is something that i see in the East end nearly every morning and it is a good way to make money. In past years there have been many comedy sketches that make cleaning windows funny, whether it be buckets of water falling or the ladder slipping from under the character. This is a possible scam that we could use, however staging it correctly within the limited amount of time we have could be a problem whilst also finding a location.
Selling cookies is yet another scheme that we could easily put together for the duo to use. It would require minimal props and we would only need to find a few houses to film at, but since friends live around our shooting location, that shouldnt be a problem. Plus the image of seeing two grown men trying to sell something usually donw by girl scouts could be funny. I'm thinking costumes. :)Selli
ng....their bodies?This was one idea we thought of ourselves as we knew that seeing the duo dressing up as women for money would definitely get some laughs and put a lighter edge on a sinister subject of prositution. We were thinking of getting the pair to lure other men over, get in the car and then run out with their clothes and money.
Sunday, 12 December 2010
Billboard Draft one
This is the design for my billboard advert of Switch. As you can see the house style for my posters follow a simple layout, with minimalist colours and the silhouette of Frank and Charlie. In this particular poster, i chose to use childish drawings/ characterture of each character with the film to reflect their personalities. I kept with the slick and simple style of previous film posters within this genre, but i realised it they lacked the comedic and juvenile edge that my film carries so that's why i decided to add the babyish pastel colours from Reservoir Dogs (Mr Pink, Mr Blue, Mr Blonde and Mr Orange). I felt that the colours lightened up the image. But i have also kept the main colours of black, white and red which i used for the title, which stays the same colour in each poster and also within the film. (Red,STENCIL font)If you look closely at the cartoon drawings i filled the lines of the images with screen grabs of the specific character from the film and organised photoshoot. I felt this was important as the poster itself doesn't reveal direct information about the film, but there are a few things that give the audience an idea.
On top of each image i added a graphic that linked each character to the film.
The light bulb on Frank as he always comes up with the ideas. A cookie for Charlie as he is seen nibbling cookies within the film, and it was also the focus for one of the duos money making schemes. A suitcase (of money) on top of Big Pete's image as he has the money that Frank and Charlie want. Finally and car for the bodyguard has he does all the car drug deals for Big Pete, and also the hole film revolves around Frank and Charlies quest to buy a car.
Wednesday, 8 December 2010
Total FILM Review - Switch
This is my first film review pagefor our film Switch.
I made this using Microsoft Publisher whilst at school, i agianwasfairly easy to do how ever, i did come across a few problems when trying to follow the house style of the original Total Film page. As i was not allow to get imagesform the internet i had to scan a page in form a genuine magazine page. But once scanned in i realised much latert in the day that the image was slightly slanted and so i was conatantly rotating the images to fit mine, so to fill up and white space within the page. I realised that Total film did this as they have made their pages look busy and full of information. An aspect i tried to follow. Below is the orginal page that i based my own page on. Apart form the layout i also used the 'Talking Point' section, placed underneath the image as it allowed me to include some background information on the film, in this case the casting. I thought it was importanyt to add this element as the target audience of the maginzine are avid film enthusiasts who want to get as much information about the reviewed film as possible on and off screen. Alot of the other reviews also add extra information about actors thats audiences might want to know. The information i add were my actors previous work, luckily we managed to get actual actors for our film, Jack Glister is a professional so i was able to add a few of his previous film and television roles. Whilst Ashley Walker is a theatre actor and added the information about his play at the Edinburgh FRINGE Festival.
Poster One Draft
This was the first draft of my first poster. As you can see i tried to replicate the house style of Lock,Stock's poster. It was faily easy to create using Adobe Photoshop Elements. Whilst creating i felt that the colours were too saturated and soo darkened the shadows and lowered the saturation levels. I also tried to incorporate elemnts from the film , so i added the graphics of a lightbulb, cookie, piggy bank and a briefcase. I felt that it added a comedic effect to the gangster theme thats was already on it.The feedback i got from this poster was that its was hard to read and didnt look like an obvious film poster. I had work to do...Tuesday, 7 December 2010
Poster Research
RESEVOIR DOGS! a brilliant film and even greater poster, i found countless amounts of poster and billboard work in my researched and i each one was different. The film follows a gang of men named the resivoir dogs, each with their own names Mr Blonde, Mr Pink, Mr White, Mr Brown, Mr Orange and Mr blue, and they are indicated on the poster by the colored background of each face (pictured left). Throughtout my research of the crime genre i found that many follow a very simplisitic style of minimalist colours and fonts. On the left the poster just shows close ups of four men within the film, with black and white writing. pure and simple. If you look closely you can also see that within the title there is a silouette of the iconic slow motion opening scene which show each character of the film. The film posters for Resevoir Dogs are what inspired my posters the most. Its slick and simple style is perfect.
Another Guy Richie blockbuster, that hit our screens in 2009. These posters are a perfect example of the simplicity that is seen within the Brit-Crime genre of film. On the left the poster allows the audience to see each main character within the film and that's it. It also has a plain white background with lower case black writing on the top showcasing the film. I feel that it is the costume that gives the audience an insight into the fil
m as we can straight away see that its going to be a very macho and gritty film, maybe based in a run down area. The sharps suits and the fact that there men are on different sides also give us an indication that there could be some gangster rivalry between the two groups. The poster on the right is even simpler with just two colours being used, it makes it harder fr the audience to guess what the film is about. The only indicators are the yellow and black which is often used on warning signs, suggesting an element of danger within the film, whilst the large diamond on the finger graphic could suggest that the storyline revolves around a large diamond.
RocknRolla is an other of Guy Richie's brilliant Brit-Crims that 
have the perfect balance of violence, action, seduction and sharp witty comedy. This is one of the busiest posters i have seen for this genre of film as they are normally very slick and simple to make the styling of the film. On the other hand the film itself is very busy with a large cast and several storyline happening at once so i guess it suits it perfectly :)
Pulp Fiction, one of Tarantino's iconic films and i chose these posters as it not only has that gritty gangster edge, but it also has an infamous double act. I was interested in how they portrayed them within the posters. Having them leaning in the door frame shows their laid back persona whilst also creating a mysterious edge as they are both watcing the girl, and Samuel L Jackson is slightly hidden.Sunday, 7 November 2010
Thursday, 4 November 2010
Wednesday, 20 October 2010
Final Script
SCENE 1
INT: Hotel room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: so what ave' you got for me lads.(Frank and Charlie look at each other
Frank: What ave' you got for us (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Franks nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the far door. As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in back wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs with action soundtrack playing over the top.
SCENE 2 -For Sale
EXT: Estate
Black title screen: DAY 1 11.38am
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street and they begin to mess about pushing each other, as Charlie continues Frank stops beside a car. A poster in the car window reads: "CAR FOR SALE £6000". Charlie goes backs to Frank and they both nod at each other, realising that this is the car that they have always wanted. The two jump up and down and hi5 each other, but Frank stops jumping noticing the price of the car. He points at the price of the car to Charlie and they turn out their pockets hoping they have enough on them. They don’t. (Close up of the contents of their pockets: coppers, buttons, gum and a kinder egg and a half eaten cookie. Seeing the cookie Charlie nibbles it as they put the contents back into their pocket. Frank is at first annoyed at Charlie’s disregards for the price of the car as he is more interested in his stale cookie so he knocks it out of Charlie hand, then realises it’s the source of his first cunning idea.
Light bulb graphic as Franks face lights up whilst thinking of his idea.
He picks up the cookie and gives it back to Charlie, then walks out of frame to start on his scheme. Charlie is left in frame and looks around to see if anyone is watching, and then shamelessly continues to nibble the dirty cookie, and he is dragged out of frame by Franks arm.
End.
SCENE 3 - Cookie sales
EXT: Estate
(Doorbell) A door opens from the inside and reveals Frank and Charlie on the doorstep with a tray of cookies stretched out. The pair smiling broadly yet creepily and are wearing homemade sash spelling 'Brownies' across their dingy clothes.
Both: COOKIES! (SMILING)They rustle the tray towards the camera and the door slams shut on them.
Split screen of three doors. Each frame showing Frank and Charlie attempting to sell cookies and one after the other the door slams.
Fade to black
Charlie and Frank walk down the street tired and disappointed from their lack of sales. Frank turns to look at Charlie and sees him nibbling the cookie. Charlie offers Frank one. Frank gets annoyed and flicks him in the eye (flicking sound) and turns to walk aways. Charlie tries to follow him still blinded walks into a lamppost. Frank looks back. (Light bulb animation)
Charlie and Frank walk past the camera. Close up of Franks face.
Scene 4
EXT. Residential Estate
Title screen reads DAY 2: 11.51am
The camera zooms out from Franks face to reveal Charlie bandaged up for the Blind man scam.
(Sound of money pot)
Bucket reads ‘Help the blind boy’ cutaway to Empty Street (cricket sound)
Frankie and Charlie seem to have given up and Frank sees someone coming in the distance. Frank hits Charlie to get back into roll. As the man approaches Frank hold the bucket up to him but his attempt fails as the man just sniggers and walks past.
Frank and Charlie are annoyed at the mans gestures. Frank shouts back at the man. Charlie copies. The man stops turns and flinches at them whilst scowling. Frank and Charlie both jump back. As Charlie continues to act blind Frank watches where the man as he walks up to a car and exchanges packages at the car window. Frank squints and sees large wad of cash. Frank is shocked at large amount of money frank grabs Charlie and follows man. Frank and Charlie are well hidden as they follow the man around street corners and into a swanky hotel.
Arrive at room 28. Still well hidden they notice the man drop a package as he walks into a suite. Frank rushes to pick it up and opens it to find a bag of drugs inside; believing that this is what got the man his big wad of cash. (Light bulb animation) Frank gets his final idea. The door to the suite then opens behind Frank and the same man is standing there looking at the pair.
MAN: You two? You been followin’ me?!
FRANK: (nervously) na, na, na we’re here for the same reason you are…
MAN: You here to see Big Pete?
FRANK: Erm, yeah.
MAN: What you got?
Frank reveals the package he just picked up and the man looks inside, surprised that Frank has drugs.
FRANK: There’s plenty more where that came from.
MAN: Come back tomorrow and you better deliver. Try and scrub up a bit too yeah?
(Camera shows Franks appearance)
SCENE 5 (Replay of scene 1)
INT: Hotel corridor/room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
(Sound of ‘groovy’ 70s music) Frank and Charlie strut down the corridor in their new suits, Charlie holding the briefcase full of “goods” as Frank signals to let him do all the talking. The door opens and the man (bodyguard type) is standing there. Man laughs as he shakes his head at their outfits and the pair enters the room.
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: You got the stuff?(Frank and Charlie look at each other)
Frank: Yeah we got it (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Frank nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut. Suspicious glances are exchanged as they slowly slide the briefcases across the table to one another. As soon as Frank has hold of the briefcase full of money, he and Charlie open it celebrating and high fiving. Frank stops dead and darts a look at Big Pete, who has also opened his briefcase, and emptied the contents of a bag into his hand for a taste test. As Big Pete dips his Pinky finger in the “drugs” and raises it towards his mouth there is a FLASHBACK – Showing Frank and Charlie laughing and filling sandwich bags with flour and sugar (make clear to audience). The scene then snaps back to real time and Big Pete’s’ finger reaches his mouth. Frank panics. Close ups of Pete’s face as he tastes the flour (slow motion). Frank then has a shocked and worried expression, he gasps. The slow motion images stop and Frank blows the “drugs” in Big Pete’s face, grabs the money and scrambles out the room.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the door. (Triumphant music) As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in background wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs. Frank and Charlie manage to out run the bodyguard. In an act of celebration, they jump and high five each other. Images freezes, slowly fades to black and the credits roll. Images are then shown of them buying the car and being in it etc.
END
INT: Hotel room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: so what ave' you got for me lads.(Frank and Charlie look at each other
Frank: What ave' you got for us (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Franks nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the far door. As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in back wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs with action soundtrack playing over the top.
SCENE 2 -For Sale
EXT: Estate
Black title screen: DAY 1 11.38am
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street and they begin to mess about pushing each other, as Charlie continues Frank stops beside a car. A poster in the car window reads: "CAR FOR SALE £6000". Charlie goes backs to Frank and they both nod at each other, realising that this is the car that they have always wanted. The two jump up and down and hi5 each other, but Frank stops jumping noticing the price of the car. He points at the price of the car to Charlie and they turn out their pockets hoping they have enough on them. They don’t. (Close up of the contents of their pockets: coppers, buttons, gum and a kinder egg and a half eaten cookie. Seeing the cookie Charlie nibbles it as they put the contents back into their pocket. Frank is at first annoyed at Charlie’s disregards for the price of the car as he is more interested in his stale cookie so he knocks it out of Charlie hand, then realises it’s the source of his first cunning idea.
Light bulb graphic as Franks face lights up whilst thinking of his idea.
He picks up the cookie and gives it back to Charlie, then walks out of frame to start on his scheme. Charlie is left in frame and looks around to see if anyone is watching, and then shamelessly continues to nibble the dirty cookie, and he is dragged out of frame by Franks arm.
End.
SCENE 3 - Cookie sales
EXT: Estate
(Doorbell) A door opens from the inside and reveals Frank and Charlie on the doorstep with a tray of cookies stretched out. The pair smiling broadly yet creepily and are wearing homemade sash spelling 'Brownies' across their dingy clothes.
Both: COOKIES! (SMILING)They rustle the tray towards the camera and the door slams shut on them.
Split screen of three doors. Each frame showing Frank and Charlie attempting to sell cookies and one after the other the door slams.
Fade to black
Charlie and Frank walk down the street tired and disappointed from their lack of sales. Frank turns to look at Charlie and sees him nibbling the cookie. Charlie offers Frank one. Frank gets annoyed and flicks him in the eye (flicking sound) and turns to walk aways. Charlie tries to follow him still blinded walks into a lamppost. Frank looks back. (Light bulb animation)
Charlie and Frank walk past the camera. Close up of Franks face.
Scene 4
EXT. Residential Estate
Title screen reads DAY 2: 11.51am
The camera zooms out from Franks face to reveal Charlie bandaged up for the Blind man scam.
(Sound of money pot)
Bucket reads ‘Help the blind boy’ cutaway to Empty Street (cricket sound)
Frankie and Charlie seem to have given up and Frank sees someone coming in the distance. Frank hits Charlie to get back into roll. As the man approaches Frank hold the bucket up to him but his attempt fails as the man just sniggers and walks past.
Frank and Charlie are annoyed at the mans gestures. Frank shouts back at the man. Charlie copies. The man stops turns and flinches at them whilst scowling. Frank and Charlie both jump back. As Charlie continues to act blind Frank watches where the man as he walks up to a car and exchanges packages at the car window. Frank squints and sees large wad of cash. Frank is shocked at large amount of money frank grabs Charlie and follows man. Frank and Charlie are well hidden as they follow the man around street corners and into a swanky hotel.
Arrive at room 28. Still well hidden they notice the man drop a package as he walks into a suite. Frank rushes to pick it up and opens it to find a bag of drugs inside; believing that this is what got the man his big wad of cash. (Light bulb animation) Frank gets his final idea. The door to the suite then opens behind Frank and the same man is standing there looking at the pair.
MAN: You two? You been followin’ me?!
FRANK: (nervously) na, na, na we’re here for the same reason you are…
MAN: You here to see Big Pete?
FRANK: Erm, yeah.
MAN: What you got?
Frank reveals the package he just picked up and the man looks inside, surprised that Frank has drugs.
FRANK: There’s plenty more where that came from.
MAN: Come back tomorrow and you better deliver. Try and scrub up a bit too yeah?
(Camera shows Franks appearance)
SCENE 5 (Replay of scene 1)
INT: Hotel corridor/room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3: 3.28pm
(Sound of ‘groovy’ 70s music) Frank and Charlie strut down the corridor in their new suits, Charlie holding the briefcase full of “goods” as Frank signals to let him do all the talking. The door opens and the man (bodyguard type) is standing there. Man laughs as he shakes his head at their outfits and the pair enters the room.
Frank and Charlie sit uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase. As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(No audio)Big Pete: You got the stuff?(Frank and Charlie look at each other)
Frank: Yeah we got it (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Frank nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera) as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut. Suspicious glances are exchanged as they slowly slide the briefcases across the table to one another. As soon as Frank has hold of the briefcase full of money, he and Charlie open it celebrating and high fiving. Frank stops dead and darts a look at Big Pete, who has also opened his briefcase, and emptied the contents of a bag into his hand for a taste test. As Big Pete dips his Pinky finger in the “drugs” and raises it towards his mouth there is a FLASHBACK – Showing Frank and Charlie laughing and filling sandwich bags with flour and sugar (make clear to audience). The scene then snaps back to real time and Big Pete’s’ finger reaches his mouth. Frank panics. Close ups of Pete’s face as he tastes the flour (slow motion). Frank then has a shocked and worried expression, he gasps. The slow motion images stop and Frank blows the “drugs” in Big Pete’s face, grabs the money and scrambles out the room.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the door. (Triumphant music) As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in background wiping their faces and chasing the pair furiously. Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs. Frank and Charlie manage to out run the bodyguard. In an act of celebration, they jump and high five each other. Images freezes, slowly fades to black and the credits roll. Images are then shown of them buying the car and being in it etc.
END
Tuesday, 19 October 2010
SWITCH Moodboard
Mood board click here#
- Dingy estate- sets the whole feel of the film and its surroundings.
- Knotted ball represents how Frank and Charlie get tangled up in ridiculous situations
- Graph represents how some of the boys schemed failed miserably but in the end they prevailed.
- Money represents everyone's character want or money. It is what drives eat character and their behaviour.
- Drugs deal
- Light bulb represents the graphic that could be used in reference to Franks bug and bright ideas.
- Dopey represents the boys dopey nature, they are naturally comical and just not very bright.
- Laurel and Hardy represent the pure comedy that we will try to place within our film.
- Cookies represent the first useless scheme that Frank comes up with.
Scene 3
SCENE 3 - Cookie sales
EXT: Residential street.
(Doorbell) A door opens from the inside and reveals Frank and Charlie on the doorstep with a tray of cookies stretched out. The pair a smiling broadly yet creepily and are wearing homemade sash spelling 'BRowNIes' across their dingy clothes.
Both: COOKIES! (SMILING)
They rustles the tray towards the camera and the door slams shut on them.
Montage of the same action from outside the house : Frank and Charlie smiling, rustling the tray, door slams in face, them walking to the next house.
Final house, Frank and Charlie are annoyed now at their lack of sales so they try anothe tactic. At the next house a young girl opend the door and Frank steps up and threatens the girls to buy a cookie ( close up: holding her by the scruff of her neck) . As the door slowly opens behind the girl, Frank looks up and, after seeing the girls 'large' dad staring back, he quickly lets go and pats the girl on the head and fixes her clothes. The dad then growls and draws his arm back to punch Frank, who quickly ducks leaving Charlie to take the punch to the face and he grabs his eye in pain. The dad then grabs the cookies and slams the door shut.
Frank and Charlie walk away from the house. Franks rips off his sash, throws it on the ground, then walks out of frame angrily. Whilst Charlie is almost crying and rubs his eye in pain he follow out of shot.
EXT: Residential street.
(Doorbell) A door opens from the inside and reveals Frank and Charlie on the doorstep with a tray of cookies stretched out. The pair a smiling broadly yet creepily and are wearing homemade sash spelling 'BRowNIes' across their dingy clothes.
Both: COOKIES! (SMILING)
They rustles the tray towards the camera and the door slams shut on them.
Montage of the same action from outside the house : Frank and Charlie smiling, rustling the tray, door slams in face, them walking to the next house.
Final house, Frank and Charlie are annoyed now at their lack of sales so they try anothe tactic. At the next house a young girl opend the door and Frank steps up and threatens the girls to buy a cookie ( close up: holding her by the scruff of her neck) . As the door slowly opens behind the girl, Frank looks up and, after seeing the girls 'large' dad staring back, he quickly lets go and pats the girl on the head and fixes her clothes. The dad then growls and draws his arm back to punch Frank, who quickly ducks leaving Charlie to take the punch to the face and he grabs his eye in pain. The dad then grabs the cookies and slams the door shut.
Frank and Charlie walk away from the house. Franks rips off his sash, throws it on the ground, then walks out of frame angrily. Whilst Charlie is almost crying and rubs his eye in pain he follow out of shot.
Scene 2
SCENE 2 -For Sale
EXT: Estate
Black title screen : DAY 1 11.38am
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street and they begin to mess about pushing each other, as Charlie continues Frank stops beside a car. A poster in the car window reads : "CAR FOR SALE £6000". Charlie goes backs to Frank and they both nod at each other, realising that this is the car that they have always wanted.The two jump up and down and hi5 each other, but Frank stops jumping noticing the price of the car. He points at the price of the car o Charlie and they turn out their pockets hoping they have enough on them.They don't. (Close up of the contents of their pockets : coppers, buttons, gum and a kinder egg and a half eaten cookie. Seeing the cookie Charlie nibbles it as they put the contents back into their pocket. Frank is at first annoyed at Charlies disregards for the price of the car as he is more interested in his stale cookie so he knocks it out of Charlie hand, then realises its the source of his first cunning idea.
Light bulb graphic as Franks face lights up whilst thinking of his idea. He picks up the cookie and gives it back to Charlie, then walks out of frame to start on his scheme. Charlie is left in frame and looks around to see if anyone is watching, then shamelessly continues to nibble the dirty cookie, and he is dragged out of frame by Franks arm.
END.
EXT: Estate
Black title screen : DAY 1 11.38am
Frank and Charlie are walking down the street and they begin to mess about pushing each other, as Charlie continues Frank stops beside a car. A poster in the car window reads : "CAR FOR SALE £6000". Charlie goes backs to Frank and they both nod at each other, realising that this is the car that they have always wanted.The two jump up and down and hi5 each other, but Frank stops jumping noticing the price of the car. He points at the price of the car o Charlie and they turn out their pockets hoping they have enough on them.They don't. (Close up of the contents of their pockets : coppers, buttons, gum and a kinder egg and a half eaten cookie. Seeing the cookie Charlie nibbles it as they put the contents back into their pocket. Frank is at first annoyed at Charlies disregards for the price of the car as he is more interested in his stale cookie so he knocks it out of Charlie hand, then realises its the source of his first cunning idea.
Light bulb graphic as Franks face lights up whilst thinking of his idea. He picks up the cookie and gives it back to Charlie, then walks out of frame to start on his scheme. Charlie is left in frame and looks around to see if anyone is watching, then shamelessly continues to nibble the dirty cookie, and he is dragged out of frame by Franks arm.
END.
Monday, 18 October 2010
Script - SWITCH scene 1
SCENE 1
INT: Hotel room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3 : 3.28pm
Scene opens with Frank and Charlie sitting uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase.As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(no audio)
Big Pete: so what ave' you got for me lads.
(Frank and Charlie look at each other)
Frank: What ave' you got for us (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Franks nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera)as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the far door. As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in back wiping they faces and chasing the pair furiously.
Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs with action soundtrack playing over the top.
Fade to black title screen : DAY 1 11.38am
SCENE 2...
INT: Hotel room.
Black screen with title reading DAY 3 : 3.28pm
Scene opens with Frank and Charlie sitting uncomfortably at a table clutching a briefcase.As the camera turns a large gangster type, Big Pete, is revealed with his bodyguard holding his suitcase.
(no audio)
Big Pete: so what ave' you got for me lads.
(Frank and Charlie look at each other)
Frank: What ave' you got for us (trying to act hard)
Big Pete looks at his bodyguards and they all burst out in hysterical laughter at the lads attempts, who also join in with a nervous laugh. Big Pete and his body guards all stop at once, leaving Frank and Charlie still laughing. They stop. Big Pete grabs the suitcase and opens it on the table to reveal that it's full of money. Charlie reaches over to touch the money, but Big Pete slams it shut before he can and demands a looks in their suitcase. Franks nods at Charlie to open the suitcase (away from camera)as Big Pete reaches over to grab the suitcase, Charlie, thinking it is normal procedure, also slams the suitcase shut.
Cut away to empty corridor, and Frank and Charlie come sprinting out of the far door. As they run down the corridor towards camera, we see both Big Pete and bodyguards in back wiping they faces and chasing the pair furiously.
Extreme close ups of running feet in corridor and down the stairs with action soundtrack playing over the top.
Fade to black title screen : DAY 1 11.38am
SCENE 2...
Sunday, 17 October 2010
Character Profile - Frank
FRANK
Age: 26 Very immature, jobless with no motivation to find work although very stupid he believes that he is intelligent so he refuses to be told he is wrong, particularity by Charlie.
Main Trait: Brains of the 'program' . Although they are not very intelligent charecters Frank is the smater to the stupid twosome, I guess you could he is the blind that is leading the blind.
Humanizing Trait: Despite being ridiculously stupid and seemingly immune from emotions, he is very loyal to Charlie and will do anything to protect him.
Profession: Left School at 16, failed every exam so had no qualifications to get into college or sixth form.
Address: He has lived opposite Charlie his whole life in an East End dingy estate. (Working class enviroment).However, he has come from a stable home brought up by his Dad.
Values: A very lazy charecter that wants to climb the status ladder but without the hard grafting it involves.He will look for the easy way out of anything, he the type to not want to run but would walk fast. He sits around the house as his Dad is rarely ever at home as doesnt take an interest in what Frank gets up to.
Foil: Frank comes up with all the cunning ideas for the schemes but always wants Charlie by his side taking part in these cunning schemes. Their plans aren't quite the same with just one of them partaking in it.
Obsession: Frank is obsessed with finding the easy way out of everything! If it involves hard work, Frank ain't involved.
Goal: To get the £6000 and more in order to buy this car that he sees for sale. He likes the idea of Charlie looking up to him so he feels if his plans are successful Charlie's respect for him will continue to grow
Idol: Frank sees himself as his own idol because in his eyes he feels he can do no wrong. Put it this way, Frank is too lazy to aspire to be like any one else.
Epitaph: ''If its my idea, its a great idea!''
Internal Conflicts: Frank is full of ideas but is very impractical, he doesn't understand the error of his ways until he realises his ideas don't work.He doesn't like to be told he is wrong so the boys have to fail at a task before they realise it was a bad idea, so Frank's inability to see his errors and not think practically plays a part in the film.
Interpersonal Conflicts:Frank is not quite Frank without Charlie as Frank does not feel as adequate without Charlie looking up to him. Frank and Charlie are a double act and without each other the film creates less of an impact on the audience.
Societal and Environmental Conflicts: He has no job aspirations, no money and no qualifications, he lives in his own little bubble which Charlie finds himself in. Despite all this he is still a very happy character as he believes in his eyes he is doing no wrong.
Best Thing That Could Ever Happen To This Character (could turn out to be the worst): Alongside Charlie he finally gets the money for the car, but with no regular income who knows how long they will be able to keep the car for, as insurance and road tax are just some of the expenses that come with having a car. !
Worst Thing That Could Ever Happen To This Character: Loosing Charlie. Charlie's presence fuels him to be the ideas person he is in the film and without Charlie egging him on Frank is not quite the same.
Why The Audience Will Root For This Character: Because he hasn't got a mean bone in his body and it will become apparent how much he feeds off of Charlie's energy. Charlie is a loveable character and anyone who loves Charlie will love Frank.
Voice:'' Walking is for LOSERS! I'm so loser, so LETS DRIVE!''
Age: 26 Very immature, jobless with no motivation to find work although very stupid he believes that he is intelligent so he refuses to be told he is wrong, particularity by Charlie.
Main Trait: Brains of the 'program' . Although they are not very intelligent charecters Frank is the smater to the stupid twosome, I guess you could he is the blind that is leading the blind.
Humanizing Trait: Despite being ridiculously stupid and seemingly immune from emotions, he is very loyal to Charlie and will do anything to protect him.
Profession: Left School at 16, failed every exam so had no qualifications to get into college or sixth form.
Address: He has lived opposite Charlie his whole life in an East End dingy estate. (Working class enviroment).However, he has come from a stable home brought up by his Dad.
Values: A very lazy charecter that wants to climb the status ladder but without the hard grafting it involves.He will look for the easy way out of anything, he the type to not want to run but would walk fast. He sits around the house as his Dad is rarely ever at home as doesnt take an interest in what Frank gets up to.
Foil: Frank comes up with all the cunning ideas for the schemes but always wants Charlie by his side taking part in these cunning schemes. Their plans aren't quite the same with just one of them partaking in it.
Obsession: Frank is obsessed with finding the easy way out of everything! If it involves hard work, Frank ain't involved.
Goal: To get the £6000 and more in order to buy this car that he sees for sale. He likes the idea of Charlie looking up to him so he feels if his plans are successful Charlie's respect for him will continue to grow
Idol: Frank sees himself as his own idol because in his eyes he feels he can do no wrong. Put it this way, Frank is too lazy to aspire to be like any one else.
Epitaph: ''If its my idea, its a great idea!''
Internal Conflicts: Frank is full of ideas but is very impractical, he doesn't understand the error of his ways until he realises his ideas don't work.He doesn't like to be told he is wrong so the boys have to fail at a task before they realise it was a bad idea, so Frank's inability to see his errors and not think practically plays a part in the film.
Interpersonal Conflicts:Frank is not quite Frank without Charlie as Frank does not feel as adequate without Charlie looking up to him. Frank and Charlie are a double act and without each other the film creates less of an impact on the audience.
Societal and Environmental Conflicts: He has no job aspirations, no money and no qualifications, he lives in his own little bubble which Charlie finds himself in. Despite all this he is still a very happy character as he believes in his eyes he is doing no wrong.
Best Thing That Could Ever Happen To This Character (could turn out to be the worst): Alongside Charlie he finally gets the money for the car, but with no regular income who knows how long they will be able to keep the car for, as insurance and road tax are just some of the expenses that come with having a car. !
Worst Thing That Could Ever Happen To This Character: Loosing Charlie. Charlie's presence fuels him to be the ideas person he is in the film and without Charlie egging him on Frank is not quite the same.
Why The Audience Will Root For This Character: Because he hasn't got a mean bone in his body and it will become apparent how much he feeds off of Charlie's energy. Charlie is a loveable character and anyone who loves Charlie will love Frank.
Voice:'' Walking is for LOSERS! I'm so loser, so LETS DRIVE!''
Character Profile - Charlie
Age: 21 but not the average 21 year old. He doesn't have a job, enjoys being a "bum" and has no aspirations for the future.
Main Trait: Probably one of the dumbest people you will ever meet without being classed as retarded. Forever following Franks' word he is an easy going idiot.
Humanizing Trait: Although Charlie is too stupid for words, he is a really loyal friend to Frank and will do anything for their friendship! Even if it means dabbling in a fake drug deal...
Profession: no qualifications, not even GCSEs - he was kicked out of school at the age of 14 due to lack of committment and attendance. When he wasn't being lazy and made the effort to go into school, he was sent home for disrupting the class and being a clown. Eventually, they just kicked him out.
Address: he has lived opposite Frank his entire life and they both live on a rundown estate. However, coming from a stable home with both parents there.
Values: Charlie enjoys playing car racing video games, eating cookies that his mum STILL cooks him and being with Frank, his best friend. He's not the sort of person to give to a needy person on the street, but not because he's rude, because he's way too stupid and broke to! He doesn't drive (yet) but enjoys pretending to drive on his games.
Foil: Charlie works at the same pace as his best friend Frank throughout the film. The main difference is that Charlie is way too dumb to think of the "cunning schemes" that Frank does. Although, as the film progresses both cahracters grow to rip off a "big time" drug dealer.
Obsession: Where Charlie is a comedic character his obsession is more of a great fondness; for video games and eating. Rather than having a dark obsession his is funny. This is because the word "obsession" is usually associated with negative and sinister actions because a character likes something/someone too much.
Goal: His goal is to get money for a car. However, he is more the puppy dog following Frank with his ideas. He's more in it for the adventure.
Idol: Charlie's idol is Frank. He respects and looks up to him like an older brother even though they're not related.
Epitaph: "aint gotta be a smarty pants to make moneys!"
Internal conflicts: The child inside Charlie is constantly alive however the actions he takes out begin to mature throughout the film. He is initially a child in a 21 year olds' body because his daily routine follows that of a young boy. e.g. playing video games, hanging around with his best friend and not worrying about the responsibilities every other 21 year old should have. So, his inner child does conflict with how he SHOULD be but both outer and inner personalities are connected.
Interpersonal conflicts: Without Charlie, the film would only be half as funny as it could be as we wouldn't have a croud favourite double act. Frank would pursue the schemes on his own and it's not funny when one person fails a stupid idea! Charlie's role in the film is vital, as is Franks; you cant have one without the other!
Societal and Environmental Conflicts: he has no money, he has no will power to find a job to make money, he has no conflict with society as he chooses to be this way. He doesn't blame society for him being lazy as he is happy to be this way.
Best thing that could happen to this character (could turn out to be the worst): Him and Frank get the money they need for the car HOWEVER this could turn out to be a bad thing as the only knowledge Charlie has of driving is in his video games!!
Worst thing that could happen to that character ( could turn out to be the best): If he lost his best friend Frank. He would be lonely and heartbroken, like a child losing their favourite toy!
Why the audience would root for this character: Mainly because he's funny but more because he's so stupid! Additionally, his and Frank's duo scams in order to get money will make the audience want them to suceed. Charlie is a really likeable character.
Voice (a despcription of the inticing incident that kicks up the drama, from the viewpoint of the character): "we... we gotta get the moneys to get the car cos then we wont 'aff to walk anymore. that would be well good!"
Main Trait: Probably one of the dumbest people you will ever meet without being classed as retarded. Forever following Franks' word he is an easy going idiot.
Humanizing Trait: Although Charlie is too stupid for words, he is a really loyal friend to Frank and will do anything for their friendship! Even if it means dabbling in a fake drug deal...
Profession: no qualifications, not even GCSEs - he was kicked out of school at the age of 14 due to lack of committment and attendance. When he wasn't being lazy and made the effort to go into school, he was sent home for disrupting the class and being a clown. Eventually, they just kicked him out.
Address: he has lived opposite Frank his entire life and they both live on a rundown estate. However, coming from a stable home with both parents there.
Values: Charlie enjoys playing car racing video games, eating cookies that his mum STILL cooks him and being with Frank, his best friend. He's not the sort of person to give to a needy person on the street, but not because he's rude, because he's way too stupid and broke to! He doesn't drive (yet) but enjoys pretending to drive on his games.
Foil: Charlie works at the same pace as his best friend Frank throughout the film. The main difference is that Charlie is way too dumb to think of the "cunning schemes" that Frank does. Although, as the film progresses both cahracters grow to rip off a "big time" drug dealer.
Obsession: Where Charlie is a comedic character his obsession is more of a great fondness; for video games and eating. Rather than having a dark obsession his is funny. This is because the word "obsession" is usually associated with negative and sinister actions because a character likes something/someone too much.
Goal: His goal is to get money for a car. However, he is more the puppy dog following Frank with his ideas. He's more in it for the adventure.
Idol: Charlie's idol is Frank. He respects and looks up to him like an older brother even though they're not related.
Epitaph: "aint gotta be a smarty pants to make moneys!"
Internal conflicts: The child inside Charlie is constantly alive however the actions he takes out begin to mature throughout the film. He is initially a child in a 21 year olds' body because his daily routine follows that of a young boy. e.g. playing video games, hanging around with his best friend and not worrying about the responsibilities every other 21 year old should have. So, his inner child does conflict with how he SHOULD be but both outer and inner personalities are connected.
Interpersonal conflicts: Without Charlie, the film would only be half as funny as it could be as we wouldn't have a croud favourite double act. Frank would pursue the schemes on his own and it's not funny when one person fails a stupid idea! Charlie's role in the film is vital, as is Franks; you cant have one without the other!
Societal and Environmental Conflicts: he has no money, he has no will power to find a job to make money, he has no conflict with society as he chooses to be this way. He doesn't blame society for him being lazy as he is happy to be this way.
Best thing that could happen to this character (could turn out to be the worst): Him and Frank get the money they need for the car HOWEVER this could turn out to be a bad thing as the only knowledge Charlie has of driving is in his video games!!
Worst thing that could happen to that character ( could turn out to be the best): If he lost his best friend Frank. He would be lonely and heartbroken, like a child losing their favourite toy!
Why the audience would root for this character: Mainly because he's funny but more because he's so stupid! Additionally, his and Frank's duo scams in order to get money will make the audience want them to suceed. Charlie is a really likeable character.
Voice (a despcription of the inticing incident that kicks up the drama, from the viewpoint of the character): "we... we gotta get the moneys to get the car cos then we wont 'aff to walk anymore. that would be well good!"
Thursday, 14 October 2010
Feedback on Treatment Three
- Really simple idea - easy to understand and simple yet effective.
- Like the idea of starting with the end and explaining how the characters ended up in their situation.
- Really like the idea of a comic duo/double act theme.
- punch in the face is a bit abrupt and out of the blue but if really exaggerated can work well in the world of your film.
- Exaggerated - slapstick comedy would have to be incorporated.
- over the top actions and expressions - rely a lot on characters!
- if it's a comedy it doesn't matter as much on the thematic unity and sticking to a running theme as the theme is the slapstick that MUST be present throughout!
After receiving this feedback, as a group, we decided there wasn't any vital elements of the treatment that we needed to change it was more considerations we need to take when casting and finding the locations to make this film work successfully.
- Like the idea of starting with the end and explaining how the characters ended up in their situation.
- Really like the idea of a comic duo/double act theme.
- punch in the face is a bit abrupt and out of the blue but if really exaggerated can work well in the world of your film.
- Exaggerated - slapstick comedy would have to be incorporated.
- over the top actions and expressions - rely a lot on characters!
- if it's a comedy it doesn't matter as much on the thematic unity and sticking to a running theme as the theme is the slapstick that MUST be present throughout!
After receiving this feedback, as a group, we decided there wasn't any vital elements of the treatment that we needed to change it was more considerations we need to take when casting and finding the locations to make this film work successfully.
Wednesday, 13 October 2010
Double Acts
As we hope for a comedy double act to appear in our film, its essential that we find the perfect combination of to characters that have that instant connection and vibe. And so i took a look at the most famous comedy duos through time.
Laurel and Hardy! - may i suggest you watch WITHOUT sound. Silent comedy at its best.
The Two Ronnies
Now to a more modern duo. Jay and Silent Bob, you may have seen them on their TV show or on the 1999 film Dogma (amazing film!). WARNING: strong language throughout. :P
Laurel and Hardy! - may i suggest you watch WITHOUT sound. Silent comedy at its best.
The Two Ronnies
Now to a more modern duo. Jay and Silent Bob, you may have seen them on their TV show or on the 1999 film Dogma (amazing film!). WARNING: strong language throughout. :P
Feedback on Treatment One
Feedback on Treatment
- hasn't been padded out - shocking to just lead to the mum leaving?
- don't have the software for the animation ideas you have
- the story needs to be stronger
- expecting more from us - something else
- depth is missing to the story
- creativeness is not flowed
- not grabbing
- need to improve the second half of the story!
- there has to be a BIG MOMENT keep the same story but play around with the order
- story isn't convincing as the mother would not leave her son with an alcoholic father
- it's twisted
- something go wrong when the mother leaves?
- end differently maybe?
*** instead of having the mother walking out have something going on behind the scenes. (Father abusing the mother) Make the mother the victim.
- the initial idea is good but the second half of the story doesn't fit.
- either work on it or start afresh
- think about how it can end
- you have a beginning now you need a middle and an end to make this story have layers and depth.
Treatment Three : Redraft
Treatment 3 - SWITCH
Tagline: How far will you go for a bit of cash?
Pitch: 20 year old Charlie and 26 year old Frank are desperate for cash after seeing a car they want for sale at a hefty £6000. Not bieng the brightest bulbs they take out quick money making schemes that fail; one after the other. Until they resort to 'The Switch'.
Treatment: The film opens on Day 3 of the SWITCH with the pair running for their lives down a corridor (angry looking gangsters in the background). Then flashing back to Day 1 we see their initial reason for their thirst for cash as the two see a car for sale that they really want. Needing to gather £6000 fast and dealing with unemployment and a lack of qualifications they soon realise they have a problem.
Standing there pondering their options, Charlie pulls out a half eaten cookie from his pocket and Frank is instantly hit by an ingenious idea. (lightbulb animation) Selling cookies!
Frank feels that selling cookies will earn them a lot of quick cash and so they go door to door attempting to sell them. However, door after door the customers are not interested and Charlie gets punched in the eye by the last potential customer! (montage of doors slamming, point of view shots from door)
Seeing Charlie clucth at his eye in pain, Frank is inspire to stage a fake charity (lightbulb animation) conning money out of people who think they are helping 'blind' Charlie. Frank grabs the attention of the only man walking down the street whilst Charlie shakes his money pot at him. However, the man is not the slightest bit interested and flashes a dirty look whilst putting his hood up. Charlie, forgetting momentarily that he is blind, shakes his fist at the passer by and Frank hits him to encourage him to stay in role. As they watch the man walk away they hear a screeching sound of a car apporaching and see it pull up next to the man they encountered. They see what SEEMS to be an inappropriate drug deal and this is where Frank is hit by his best idea yet - The Switch.
Frank is convinced that if they cut a slice of a drug deal they will have more than enough money to buy the car. So they go home and gather together a bundle of drugs. Flour and sugar. Believing that this is a sure in way to make some cash, they fix themselves up to look the part (switching costumes) and go to meet 'Big Pete' the hardest gangster on the estate.
The meeting place and time is sorted and the two find themselves in a hotel room across the table from Big Pete who is willing to give them the money they need in exchange for the 'drugs'. The deal goes well, until Big Pete does a taste test and finds that the drugs taste a little sweeter than they should and their cover is blown. Frank literally blows the 'drug' in Big Pete's face and the two make a run for it. Running for their lives they get free and the film ends with both Frank and Charlie high fiving each other with the breifcase full of money in sight.
Credits roll with numerous pictures of the double act in their new car.
Tuesday, 12 October 2010
Treatment Three
Treatment Three - HEIST.
HEIST follows two east end lads Frank and Charlie trying their hand at quick-fix ways of making some cash.
The film opens on Day 3 of the HEIST with the pair running for their lives down a corridor with some huge and angry looking gangsters hot on their tail. Then jumping to Day 1 we see their initial reason for their thirst for cash as the two see a for sale sign on a car that the lazy two really want. Needing to gather £6000 fast and dealing with unemployment and a lack of qualifications they soon realise they have problem.
Standing there pondering their options, Charlie pulls out a half eaten cookie from his pocket and Frank is instantly hit by an ingenious idea. Selling cookies!
Frank feels that selling cookies will earn them a lot of quick cash and so they go door to door attempting to sell cookies. But their scheme fails as one by one the doors get slammed right back in their faces.
As they walk around, Frank waiting for more inspiration and Charlie just completely clueless, Charlie feels a sharp pain in his knee. When he pulls up his trouser leg to find a sore graze, Frank is struck with another plan!
They decide to dress up as women and sell themselves for money. When going through with this scheme however, they come to the realisation they can't actually make love to another man - by this time though it is too late. They run from the car with a watch and a wallet that they stole; alongside the mans' trousers! They make a break for it and hide in some bushes escaping the mans' chase. Only to find the watch is priceless and the wallet is empty.
As they begin to lose hope, they stumble along an inappropriate meeting of two cars and what appears to be a drug deal. This is when Frank is hit by the best idea yet... THE HEIST. Frank and Charlie then go back to their house and make up their own bundle of drugs. Flour and sugar. Believing that this is a sure in way to make some cash, they fix themselves up to look the part and go to meet Big Pete the hardest gangster on the estate.
The meeting place and time is sorted and the two find themselves in a hotel room across the table from Big Pete who is willing to give them the £6000 they need in exchange for the 'drugs'. The deal goes well, until Big Pete does a taste test and finds that the drugs taste a little sweeter than he remembers and their cover is blown. Frank blows the 'drug' in Big Pete's face and the two LEG IT. Running for their live they get free and the film ends with both Frank and Pete buying the car that they wanted.
HEIST follows two east end lads Frank and Charlie trying their hand at quick-fix ways of making some cash.
The film opens on Day 3 of the HEIST with the pair running for their lives down a corridor with some huge and angry looking gangsters hot on their tail. Then jumping to Day 1 we see their initial reason for their thirst for cash as the two see a for sale sign on a car that the lazy two really want. Needing to gather £6000 fast and dealing with unemployment and a lack of qualifications they soon realise they have problem.
Standing there pondering their options, Charlie pulls out a half eaten cookie from his pocket and Frank is instantly hit by an ingenious idea. Selling cookies!
Frank feels that selling cookies will earn them a lot of quick cash and so they go door to door attempting to sell cookies. But their scheme fails as one by one the doors get slammed right back in their faces.
As they walk around, Frank waiting for more inspiration and Charlie just completely clueless, Charlie feels a sharp pain in his knee. When he pulls up his trouser leg to find a sore graze, Frank is struck with another plan!
They decide to dress up as women and sell themselves for money. When going through with this scheme however, they come to the realisation they can't actually make love to another man - by this time though it is too late. They run from the car with a watch and a wallet that they stole; alongside the mans' trousers! They make a break for it and hide in some bushes escaping the mans' chase. Only to find the watch is priceless and the wallet is empty.
As they begin to lose hope, they stumble along an inappropriate meeting of two cars and what appears to be a drug deal. This is when Frank is hit by the best idea yet... THE HEIST. Frank and Charlie then go back to their house and make up their own bundle of drugs. Flour and sugar. Believing that this is a sure in way to make some cash, they fix themselves up to look the part and go to meet Big Pete the hardest gangster on the estate.
The meeting place and time is sorted and the two find themselves in a hotel room across the table from Big Pete who is willing to give them the £6000 they need in exchange for the 'drugs'. The deal goes well, until Big Pete does a taste test and finds that the drugs taste a little sweeter than he remembers and their cover is blown. Frank blows the 'drug' in Big Pete's face and the two LEG IT. Running for their live they get free and the film ends with both Frank and Pete buying the car that they wanted.
Wednesday, 6 October 2010
Interview with...Mrs Doubtfire/ Daniel Hillard
Good afternoon Mrs Doubtfire, or am i speaking to Daniel haha?
*laughs* No, you're definitely speaking to Daniel here, although she might just pop up every now and then, you know what she is like.
Yes, i know what she is like, but i want to know more about you Daniel, can i call you Daniel?
Of course, in fact call me Dan, my mother calls me daniel. Especially when i annoy her with my voices an he alwa ving a go at e
So DAN, ovb sly it was ha d when
*laughs* No, you're definitely speaking to Daniel here, although she might just pop up every now and then, you know what she is like.
Yes, i know what she is like, but i want to know more about you Daniel, can i call you Daniel?
Of course, in fact call me Dan, my mother calls me daniel. Especially when i annoy her with my voices an he alwa ving a go at e
So DAN, ovb sly it was ha d when
Interview with...Mrs Doubtfire/ Daniel Hillard
Good afternoon Mrs Doubtfire, or am i speaking to Daniel haha?
*laughs* No, you're definitely speaking to Daniel there, although she might just pop up every now and then, you know what she is like.
Yes, i know what she is like, but i want to know more about you Daniel, can i call you Daniel?
Of course, in fact call me Dan, my mother calls me daniel. Especially when i annoy her with my voices
*laughs* No, you're definitely speaking to Daniel there, although she might just pop up every now and then, you know what she is like.
Yes, i know what she is like, but i want to know more about you Daniel, can i call you Daniel?
Of course, in fact call me Dan, my mother calls me daniel. Especially when i annoy her with my voices
Treatment 1- Redraft
Treatment 1: The Adventures of Dan and Alfie - The Attack of Kryptonite Karly
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Treatment:
Like most young boys Alfie always saw his Dad(Dan) as his hero. Doing most father duties his Dad was his idol. They played football together, ate ice cream together and he taught Alfie how to ride a bike. Being his Dad's sidekick was all he ever wanted. But the adventures were always cut short by Mummy(Karly) putting little Alfie to bed.
Meanwhile . . . Daddies hidden addiction to Kryptonite was much stronger than his love for his family; but even after 5 long, yet strenuous, years mummy couldn't take it anymore. Karly leaves Alfie behind, believing he will live a happier life without her, and hopes Dan will change his ways now he has to look after his son.But once she walks out and Alfie grows older, one drunken night after another, Daddy's super hero qualities soon fade and Alfie sees him for the villain he really is.
Dear Diary ...
Diary Entry 4 - 6.10.10
Today we found out that we would be getting a new group member....Esther Odinma.
This was a surprised, but no doubt a good surprise and now it means that we will have I extra brain, 1 extra pair of hands and more ideas for our final production. WOOP!
WELCOME ESTHER!!
x
Today we found out that we would be getting a new group member....Esther Odinma.
This was a surprised, but no doubt a good surprise and now it means that we will have I extra brain, 1 extra pair of hands and more ideas for our final production. WOOP!
WELCOME ESTHER!!
x
Dear Diary ...
Diary Entry 3 - 5.10.10 - 6.10.10
Today we watched and discussed three short films from a UK Film Council collection which each had limited dialogue. From each we had to note how they conveyed their message clearly without excessive dialogue.
We analysed each film in the categories:
Plot points - The parts of the film where the story changes dramatically or there is an action which changes the course of events.
Pithy Dialogue - The dialogue used is short and only gives the audience relevant information as there is limited time. The message is put across clearly.
Motivated/Rounded/Believable Characters: Remember that each character is thoroughly thought about and is given a back story or motive that drives their character to behave in the way that they do. Always think whether the characters are believable....would they say that?...would they do that?....would they dress like that? etc.
From this lesson we were supposed to go away and see if we could restructure and improve our own ideas using similar techniques that were used in the film, whilst also incorporating AMAZING plot points, BREATHE TAKING dialogue and INCREDIBLE characters.
x
Today we watched and discussed three short films from a UK Film Council collection which each had limited dialogue. From each we had to note how they conveyed their message clearly without excessive dialogue.
We analysed each film in the categories:
Plot points - The parts of the film where the story changes dramatically or there is an action which changes the course of events.
Pithy Dialogue - The dialogue used is short and only gives the audience relevant information as there is limited time. The message is put across clearly.
Motivated/Rounded/Believable Characters: Remember that each character is thoroughly thought about and is given a back story or motive that drives their character to behave in the way that they do. Always think whether the characters are believable....would they say that?...would they do that?....would they dress like that? etc.
From this lesson we were supposed to go away and see if we could restructure and improve our own ideas using similar techniques that were used in the film, whilst also incorporating AMAZING plot points, BREATHE TAKING dialogue and INCREDIBLE characters.
x
Monday, 4 October 2010
Dear Diary ...
Diary Entry 2 4.10.10
Today, the group met for 2 hours and discussed and applied a treatment to our final two story ideas. We then gave them both titles and taglines. It was a difficult process as we had limited time, but i have happy with the outcome and i look forward to hopefully shooting one of the ideas.
Today, the group met for 2 hours and discussed and applied a treatment to our final two story ideas. We then gave them both titles and taglines. It was a difficult process as we had limited time, but i have happy with the outcome and i look forward to hopefully shooting one of the ideas.
Treatment 2: In and Out
Tagline: There's falling hard for someone you love, but you fall out harder.
Josh and Beth have a lot in common, they both drink coffee, enjoy watching horror films and walk their dogs in the local park. They are very similar. Oh, and they both have very short tempers.Falling in love is the best feeling for most young couples, for this pair however it was their downfall. Anger, lust and jealousy ultimately destroyed the relationship they shared, with a combination of violence and mind games the relationship deteriorated and they had to go their separate ways just waiting for cupid to strike again.
The video below is the new single 'Shame' by Robbie Williams and Gary Barlow in which it shows how the two rekindled their love and friendship after many years of fight. Although In and Out will portray falling OUT of love, nevertheless this video shows some great shots which captures that 'love at first sight' moment.....see if you can spot it:P
Enjoy.
Treatment 1: The Adventures of Frank and Alfie - The Attack of Kryptonite Kathy
Tagline:
Treatment:
Like most young boys Alfie always saw his Dad as his hero. Doing most father duties his Dad was his idol. They played football together, ate ice cream together and he taught Alfie how to ride a bike. Being his Dad's sidekick was all he ever wanted. But the adventures were always cut short by Mummy(Kathy) putting little Alfie to bed.
Meanwhile . . . Daddies hidden addiction to Kryptonite was much stronger than his love for his family; and mummy couldn't take it anymore.Once she walks out Daddy's super hero qualities fade and Alfie sees him for the villain he really is.
Wednesday, 29 September 2010
Dear Diary...
Diary Entry 1: 30.9.10
Today was my first meeting with my final production group members. I am very excited to say that i am with Rachel O'Connell and Sharon Uyinwmen as i know that we will each work very well together. Today we just had to presennt our story ideas to each other and pitch a few thoughts of how we want the film to look, in the sense of camera filters, colours movement and text. We also brainstormed theme ideas and came up these:
- a mystery at the beginning that is revealed at the end
- Dreaming - our own world where anything can happen - falling asleep
- falling ill - my sisters keeper
- Everyone has a weakness - Kryptonite is supermans and he is the most famous hero in the world??
- substance abuse - fall through reality
- the fall AND rise...?
- the fall through society
- Loss of innocence
- Graphic Matching > Robert Lepage
- Fall - Autumn
- Falling from success once being at their peak
- DEATH - ultimate fall
- Falling out (with friends)
- Falling from grace
- Falling in love
- Falling OUT of love
- Subtitles for silent film?
- effects onscreen - black and white? sepia?
- use of shadows and lighting.
Today was my first meeting with my final production group members. I am very excited to say that i am with Rachel O'Connell and Sharon Uyinwmen as i know that we will each work very well together. Today we just had to presennt our story ideas to each other and pitch a few thoughts of how we want the film to look, in the sense of camera filters, colours movement and text. We also brainstormed theme ideas and came up these:
- a mystery at the beginning that is revealed at the end
- Dreaming - our own world where anything can happen - falling asleep
- falling ill - my sisters keeper
- Everyone has a weakness - Kryptonite is supermans and he is the most famous hero in the world??
- substance abuse - fall through reality
- the fall AND rise...?
- the fall through society
- Loss of innocence
- Graphic Matching > Robert Lepage
- Fall - Autumn
- Falling from success once being at their peak
- DEATH - ultimate fall
- Falling out (with friends)
- Falling from grace
- Falling in love
- Falling OUT of love
- Subtitles for silent film?
- effects onscreen - black and white? sepia?
- use of shadows and lighting.
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